The first part is up on fanfiction .net. what do you guys think? I'm going to make a movie trailer 'layout' for the fic too because making trailers are...well...fun, what can i say? Also I'd like critique on the characters and how well i portray them! I want them to be as much like they would really be as possible.

Can i just post what i have here in this category, can i put a link here, or what? I'm not quite sure whats allowed here, except i know this is the category to talk about/or post fanfics.
for now there are going to be two posts like these unless a mod. or admin delete the one in this fic archive.
OOPS I REALIZED THERE WERE TWO TOPICS SINCE A MOD/OR ADMIN GOT TO MOVING THE TOPIC SO SOON

HERE's the link:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2396303/1/