Brotherly love. My Kr fanfic.

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Brotherly love. My Kr fanfic.

Post by kido » Tue Dec 23, 2003 5:38 pm

I got this story and I like to read it and judge it for yourself.

http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1653686
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Post by Sith » Tue Dec 23, 2003 10:47 pm

Good start.:)

Look forward to your next part. Hmm... really must get round to finishing mine.

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Post by knightimmortal » Tue Dec 23, 2003 11:14 pm

Interesting start, I am interested in seeing the next part, but I do, however have one recommendation: you might look to get a beta reader, somebody who can check you specifically for grammatical and spelling errors. The story has great potential, but some of the errors do take away from the flow.

And yes, Sith *nudge*. ;)

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Post by kido » Wed Dec 24, 2003 2:43 pm

Thanks, comments are always welcome. :D

I did a little tinkering with the story to make it more readable.
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Random shorty

Post by kido » Fri Dec 26, 2003 1:45 pm

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Post by CK » Fri Dec 26, 2003 6:32 pm

Nice story there kido. Just read your newest one....strange that it's Kitt. Somehow I can see Karr getting drunk but not Kitt. Story needs a little background to it, like how did he get that way in the first place eg. case gone bad, emotional problems,...*has strange images of a funnel sticking out of the gas tank with a beer tap nearby* hmmm

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Post by kido » Fri Dec 26, 2003 7:52 pm

CK wrote:Nice story there kido. Just read your newest one....strange that it's Kitt. Somehow I can see Karr getting drunk but not Kitt. Story needs a little background to it, like how did he get that way in the first place eg. case gone bad, emotional problems,...*has strange images of a funnel sticking out of the gas tank with a beer tap nearby* hmmm

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Well I didn't think that far ahead, it was just something random me and my brothers thought up.

I guess they partied too hard for the holidays or something.. :wink:
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Post by kido » Tue Jan 13, 2004 9:56 pm

http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1657573&chapter=2

Part 2 up! :wink:

By the way, I took down my brotherly love fic for some editing.
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